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总结招生官最爱和最恨的文书有哪些特点.

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  只有各项成绩与文书通力合作,互相弥补,才能将申请人成功地推向理想的学校。美国留学文书不能简单地将中文译为英文,而要用有限的文字立体化地展现自身优势和亮点。那么美国大学招生官最喜欢和最不喜欢的文书有哪些特点呢?

  先从个人陈述的选材说起

  Common Application的五个题目中被最多选得的题目是Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.占到了总批改个人陈述的90%以上。在看了百来篇个人陈述之后,我们有读到学生对潜水的热爱,传统舞蹈的认识,环境污染的感慨,女性地位的深思等等,取材范围广泛。

  但不得不说,在看了那么多文章之后,让我至今印象深刻的文章有那么几个特征:

  1.文章引发了我的好奇心

  2.文章激发了我的求知心和思考

  3.学生对自我的认知准确,分析透彻

  4.学生的笔触真诚,情感自然流露

  而让我看第一眼就萌生出cliché (陈腔滥调)感觉的文章围绕的话题是:

  1.Perseverance

  2.Public speaking

  3.Volunteer

  4.Get out of comfort zone during foreign exchange

  文书撰写四大陈词滥调,你中了哪一个?

  还在笔耕不辍的同学们你想好剩下的学校文章写什么了吗?

  再聊聊Why Essay

  如果说Why Essay听起来有些陌生,那么大学申请文书中的supplement想必经常见了,其实这就是所谓的why essay,大致上问学生“你为什么想来我们这所学校?” “我们这里哪里吸引你?”等等。这种问题用于区分学生是否真的对这所学校有passion或者fit。

  要回答好这类问题,申请者必须展现出对学校的了解,学校文化/氛围的认可,和对自己未来展望的认知。

  第一步了解学校

  通过各种渠道去了解这个学校的特色,比如大学官网、www.aoji.cn usnews、Princeton review、 之前的校友,或者学校的巡展活动。找出这个学校吸引你的地方,不论大小都可以。

  第二步了解自己

  一般情况下,当申请者写到why essay 的时候应该已经到了申请中期,也通过头脑风暴或自我反思在一定程度上了解了自己。如果没有的话,花几分钟时间回顾一下过往活动,起码得知道自己的性格、学术上的长处短板在哪里。

  第三步将学校吸引眼球的点缩减成特质并联系自己(找到自己和学校特质间的联系)

  当申请者挖掘出那么一、两个吸引点后,要学会透过表面看事情本质。因为学校的特色和申请者不可能有直接关系,但是这个特色代表的意义可能和申请者自己的追求不谋而合,就会形成一个fit。

  最后说说那些年大家都犯过的错

  1. 写文书的时候请尽可能的使用active voice而不是passive voice, 因为这样的语言更直接,简洁,清晰。

  “The active voice(stating the subject that performs the action, like “My friend asked me…”)instead of the passive voice (not stating who the action was performed by, like“I was asked…”) will usually allow you to be more concise and clear. ”

  2. 写正式的文书的时候记得少用缩写哦!

  “Try to stay away from contractions (for example: use “I am” instead of “I’m”) and abbreviations in order to preserve the formality of your essay. These aren’t difficult edits to make; you’ll have a much more professional personal statement afterwards. ”

  3. 不要啰嗦,去除对读者来说无关的信息。(师父~求你不要再碎碎念啦!)

  “One of the common errors is wordiness, and you can try to pay attention to this by asking yourself (a) is it necessary to have certain words, or can one word capture the meaning of two/three words, and (b) is it necessary to have certain phrases, because some of these phrases, while sounding nice, do not contribute significantly to your essay. “

  4. 避免使用不恰当的SAT词汇或罕见词汇,造成读者阅读不流畅。

  “I suggest that you don’t overuse or use too much SAT vocabulary in your essay, because then it will not sound natural. However, try to incorporate more fective vocabulary when you can.”

  5. 避免运用过多的对话或引用很多书或影视中的句子,这会让读者感觉作者的想法和声音被埋没了。

  “You have too much dialogue in your essay. Using quotes may be a good way to catch the reader's attention. However, using it too much make it look like you are not capable of fectively expressing your ideas in words, because you are borrowing other people’s words by using direct quotes. Use one-two quotes and eliminate the rest by explaining them in words. ”

  6. 不要假设读者明白你在说的事物,从读者的角度出发去考虑你的表达方式。

  “Avoid broad generalizations and vague rerences. Remember that the reader isn’t one of your friends; he or she won’t know very much about your life. For example, explain the particular physics term, the reason why you enjoy reading and writing, or how you gained your courage in overcoming illness. ”

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