兽医专业申请医学专业PS(中英点评).

　　Veterinary Background

　　Changing the bandage on an angry bulldog’s paw or trimming the hooves of a 2000-pound draft horse can be an intimidating venture. Curing animals requires compassion, precision, and confidence; it is also an excellent way to learn about practicing medicine and to feel the satisfaction of helping someone in need. Due to my rural background, knowledge of animals, and love of science, I began working for a local veterinarian at a young age. Later in life, when I decided to become a physician, I saw that my veterinary experiences had prepared me well for a career in health care.

　　When I started volunteering in an emergency room, I learned that humans really aren&apost so different from other animals -- I needed to show my compassion in order to earn their trust bore I could heal or comfort them. When a child or widow brought me their dying pet and pleaded for me to cure it, I had to soothe the person as well as the animal. I used this calm compassion in the emergency room when comforting the family of a father who had just suffered a heart attack, or when talking with a husband frantic about his wife’s car accident. I saw further similarities between human and animal medicine when I shadowed Dr. Harry Williams in his family practice. I saw that his close relationship with his patients led him to keep thinking of them long after his office closed for the day. Likewise, as a veterinary technician, I had often carully considered how to help each animal. Compassion is truly a prerequisite for any career in health care.

　　In my work with animals, I learned that perseverance is key to successful treatment. Interruption of that treatment can lead to disastrous results. In many rural communities near my home, I witnessed the consequences of the absence of consistent medical care. As a farrier, I have worked in many old-order Mennonite communities whose needs aren’t being met: when one client&aposs daughter injured her hand in a corn sheller, she was unable to get medical care because facilities were far away and no doctors could come to their farm. The girl’s hand was infected and not healing well. I did what I could, but I was troubled that I didn’t have the expertise to treat the injury. On my next visit, I saw that her hand had grown dormed. Had she been able to see a physician more frequently, her hand might have healed correctly. Encounters of this kind have revealed to me the consequences of medically underserved communities. I look forward to working toward a solution to this problem when I am a physician.

　　A good veterinarian operates with precision. I have applied the carul, exacting skills I learned with animals to my lab work. I am currently involved in research on corneal endothelium with Dr. Carson Kennedy. In the lab, we study mammalian corneal cells; eventually, we would like to describe and prevent ophthalmic diseases such as glaucoma. Through this work, I have honed my scientific skills and sharpened my analytical mind. It is exhilarating to catch a glimpse of valuable knowledge, not yet known by anyone, which has the potential to help many people. It is also very rewarding to know that I have contributed to the advancement of medicine by providing research results that will improve people’s health.

　　Perhaps the most important quality required to practice human or animal medicine is confidence. In the lab, in the emergency room, and in the field, I have had many opportunities to observe the importance of confident leadership to a medical practice. Over the years, I have observed that the best veterinarians and physicians handle each issue swiftly and appropriately, delegating tasks to others with self-assurance. In every medical situation, someone must take the lead role while working to manage the team. Leadership roles have always come naturally to me -- I spent twelve years working toward becoming an Eagle Scout and helping my younger brother to do the same. The composure I gained as a troop leader helped me to excel in my role as supervisor at a large walking horse farm. Since then, I have grown into leadership roles that required more significant responsibilities. I am comfortable as a leader because I am confident in my ability to ensure the health and safety of others. The leadership skills I have developed will be a vital part of my work as a physician.

　　When I began working as a veterinary technician, I did not fully realize that the skills I gained would be so applicable to my eventual career as a physician. Yet my experiences with animals have provided me with an excellent foundation to continue my studies of human health and well-being. I am eager to develop the medical knowledge I have gained thus far in order to become the kind of physician my community will be able to rely on.

　　结构解析：

　　这是一篇申请医学的文章是很成功的。说实话我是很喜欢的。

　　我们看一下这篇文章的结构：

　　第一部分，开头。

　　在这部分开门见山的点中了题目，兽医的经历。

　　第二部分，延伸引入。

　　光看了开头让人很迷惑，怎么兽医的来申请医学了呢。所以这里解释引入一下，告诉别人，我之前的经历和和现在的申请有关系的。

　　第三部分，主体。

　　这里主要是在讲自己的医学上的经历，跟老师做实验也好，还是之前的社会活动，结合这些事情来说自己在医学上的认识，非常的真实也令人信服。而且作者的逻辑性很强，由潜到深的叙述，一切都显得那么自然。虽然很多东西都是专业的东西，但是结合他所说的东西并不显得枯燥。

　　第四部分，升华。

　　通过对主体部分的总结，写出了自己对专业的一些看法，领导能力对于外科医生非常重要。并且详细的写出了自己的观点。

　　第五部分，结尾

　　在升华的基础上，点名了自己的目的，说出了自己的目标。

　　点评：

　　可以说这篇文章的格式是相当的标准的，一共是6段，分为很标准的5个部分。结构清晰，让人可以很清晰的知道作者要表达的思想和内容。不像很多作者在做文章的时候太散太乱。这篇文章中我最喜欢的就是这点。而且这篇文章的中心很明确，并且用兽医的经历把整个文章串了起来。可以说兽医的经历就好像是一根绳子，牢牢的把各个部分有机的连接起来，让人看到文章的时候第一个感觉就是整体感好。可以说，很多时候学生在做个人陈述的时候，都喜欢简历试的罗列，一个个人陈述洋洋洒洒的XX段，看得我头都大了。并且都是一种纯的罗列试描述，我做了什么，通过多少时间得到了什么结果，纯的描述。没有任何的逻辑思维，给人的一个感觉，就是乱。除了达到了简历的效果之外什么都得不到。乱糟糟的，我看了都头疼，你想想那些天天看材料看到要吐的评审委员会成员们会怎么看你的这个东西呢?我想这个就不用我来说了吧。

　　良好的文章结构代表了良好的逻辑思维能力。这个是毋庸置疑的，并且从我得到的一些信息来看，我至少是相信一点，就是评审委员会的人在看你文章的时候，同时也是在看你的逻辑思维能力，毕竟做科研的人，没有一个良好的逻辑思维能力是不可能的。专业固然重要，但是我们要掌握怎么去表现我们的专业。简历有简历的用处，有它应该体现的点，PS有PS应该体现的点，如果你想把简历做成PS，如果你想把PS组成简历，这是什么?前者，画蛇添足;后者，照猫画虎反类犬。都是四不像的东西，并且掩盖住了我们本应该体现的点。这样你真的就认为你的PS就是好的PS吗?

　　好的PS不在于文章的形式，不在于内容怎么写，不在于开头怎么写，没有一个定式，没有一个模板，没有一个套路。但是核心是一样的，体现我专业的深度，或能力。那么怎么把你的文章组织好，用一个很好的线串联起来。逻辑思维的体现。切记简历试PS，你有没有这样的想法?有，必要改正。