数学专业个人陈述十(附评论).

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　　Mathematics is a subject that attracts me because of its beauty and its intricacy. My passion for this subject has developed because of its ingenuity; the challenging task of solving difficult problems, subsequently recognising a more lucid, smarter solution that can be adapted to be used in similar problems in the future.

　　“Ingenuity in Mathematics” by Ross Honsberger is an example of a text that has fuelled my drive to widen my mathematical knowledge. I find it fascinating how perplexing problems, which initially seem impossible, but by thinking imaginatively, have numerous methods to finding solutions. The essay ‘Probability and pi’ appeals to me because of the incredible result of how pi relates to the probability of picking two numbers.

　　Attending a Financial Mathematics Day at Morgan Stanley has helped me to understand how crucial Mathematics is to the financial sector. For instance, the use of the exponential function in continuous compounding interest is an example of how Mathematics can simplify problems and how compound Poisson calculations can be use to model the trends of economic data. These two examples have shown me how Mathematics can model distributions of the world and has reinforced my desire study the subject further.

　　From reading “What is Mathematics?” by Courant and Robbins, I was given an insight into university Mathematics. I particularly enjoyed the recently added chapter by Stewart on Fermat’s Last Theorem. This shows how one conjecture can unnerve mathematicians globally for over three centuries. To understand many of the solutions within this text, I often repeated the calculations as Courant has said, “you cannot learn music only by listening. When reproducing the calculations, I am able to further understand the concepts, and be able to use some of the imaginative techniques in the future.

　　Currently, I am participating in the Duke of Edinburgh Silver Award scheme. Participating in the bronze award has helped develop my ability to work in a team and tested my determination and motivation. The award has increased my motivation for cycling, after which I have cycled in events for charitable purposes.

　　For the past three years, I have been teaching and coaching GCSE students in Mathematics. This mentoring has helped consolidate my own mathematical knowledge by explaining and justifying mathematical concepts to the group. From the progression of the mentoring, I learnt how important it is to express mathematical ideas both clearly and concisely, and this has been rlected in the way I answer mathematical questions myself. As a result of my charitable work, I was awarded a Millennium Volunteers award.

　　I have also participated in the Young Enterprise scheme. The experience gained from this was invaluable and it had a particular input on my ability to communicate ideas in a clear way. As the Operations Director, this proved essential, as I often had to describe methods of production, justify choices of raw materials and explain the production line to my peers. Due to the commitment of the board members and our creative approach, our firm won ‘The Most Innovative Product’ Award.

　　My passion has inspired me to continue my education to a higher level in Mathematics and I am sure that this challenge of improving my Mathematics will be one that I will thoroughly enjoy.

　　GENERAL COMMENTS

　　This is a decent fort at a personal statement that has made a good attempt to answer the questions implicitly asked in a personal statement. The applicant has shown that they have a wide range of activities on which to draw experiences and has made reasonable attempts to explain how these experiences are relevant through mention of transferable skills. There is good use of mentoring/coaching and popular maths books to demonstrate both an interest and ability in the subject. For the most part the applicant has demonstrated good control of the statement, knowing what they want to say and why they are saying it.

　　The negative aspects which prevent this from being a top class statement are firstly in the structure of the statement. The ordering is not always logical and would benit from a natural progression; an interest in maths leading on to books and mentoring followed by work experiences, then hobbies and outside interests bore rounding off with a conclusion. There are two paragraphs on books and these should be merged together. In some cases the sentence structure itself is a little careless with a few silly mistakes which could have been avoided by thorough proof-reading (prerably by someone else who is new to the statement). Some of the sentences could be more succinct to remove unnecessary vocabulary and simplify the message. The applicant has tried to tie in their experiences to the key aims of the statement, which shows good awareness, but in a few cases I feel that the links are not sufficiently justified or explained (in particular why it means they want to study the subject).

　　Overall this is a solid statement which ticks all the basic boxes for what a personal statement should do. It shows a keen interest in the subject, relevant experiences and a well rounded individual. Such is the importance of academic interest and enthusiasm in a statement that this negates many of the shortcomings of the statement. It’s a good length and would in my opinion provide good support to an application at a good university (top 10) but may require improvement in some of the suggested areas to provide real weight in its own right to an application at a top 5 institution. The applicant received an offer from Oxford on the basis of this application, although other factors such as a good interview performance will undoubtedly have played a part in receiving this offer and I do see room for improvement in the quality of the actual statement. A perfect statement is not essential for application to the likes of Oxford or Cambridge but it all helps.

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　　以下是澳际留学为大家收集的美国数学专业PS，美国数学专业申请个人陈述，希望帮助大家申请！

　　Mathematics is a subject that attracts me because of its beauty and its intricacy. My passion for this subject has developed because of its ingenuity; the challenging task of solving difficult problems, subsequently recognising a more lucid, smarter solution that can be adapted to be used in similar problems in the future.

　　“Ingenuity in Mathematics” by Ross Honsberger is an example of a text that has fuelled my drive to widen my mathematical knowledge. I find it fascinating how perplexing problems, which initially seem impossible, but by thinking imaginatively, have numerous methods to finding solutions. The essay ‘Probability and pi’ appeals to me because of the incredible result of how pi relates to the probability of picking two numbers.

　　Attending a Financial Mathematics Day at Morgan Stanley has helped me to understand how crucial Mathematics is to the financial sector. For instance, the use of the exponential function in continuous compounding interest is an example of how Mathematics can simplify problems and how compound Poisson calculations can be use to model the trends of economic data. These two examples have shown me how Mathematics can model distributions of the world and has reinforced my desire study the subject further.

　　From reading “What is Mathematics?” by Courant and Robbins, I was given an insight into university Mathematics. I particularly enjoyed the recently added chapter by Stewart on Fermat’s Last Theorem. This shows how one conjecture can unnerve mathematicians globally for over three centuries. To understand many of the solutions within this text, I often repeated the calculations as Courant has said, “you cannot learn music only by listening. When reproducing the calculations, I am able to further understand the concepts, and be able to use some of the imaginative techniques in the future.

　　Currently, I am participating in the Duke of Edinburgh Silver Award scheme. Participating in the bronze award has helped develop my ability to work in a team and tested my determination and motivation. The award has increased my motivation for cycling, after which I have cycled in events for charitable purposes.

　　For the past three years, I have been teaching and coaching GCSE students in Mathematics. This mentoring has helped consolidate my own mathematical knowledge by explaining and justifying mathematical concepts to the group. From the progression of the mentoring, I learnt how important it is to express mathematical ideas both clearly and concisely, and this has been rlected in the way I answer mathematical questions myself. As a result of my charitable work, I was awarded a Millennium Volunteers award.

　　I have also participated in the Young Enterprise scheme. The experience gained from this was invaluable and it had a particular input on my ability to communicate ideas in a clear way. As the Operations Director, this proved essential, as I often had to describe methods of production, justify choices of raw materials and explain the production line to my peers. Due to the commitment of the board members and our creative approach, our firm won ‘The Most Innovative Product’ Award.上12下

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